xanthan gum

beautiful imagery. it was short but perfect - the title, was an eye catcher, and the poem itself was very good. my favorite parts: floating hair, the tip-touch of red ...

okay, first of all you need to add more to this. or, rather, i think you should. it would certainly help the feeling of the poem. truthfully, i didn't see ...

even though the rhyming pattern was simple, this poem had power. it was beautiful. good, good. now - in the last two stanzas, why brother and sister? what do they ...

good for a first poem, but never take that as an excuse! i'd try to incorporate more poetic language and imagery. also, you had various spelling mistakes. that takes away ...

wow. this is fair work for a nine year old. only adding to the critiques - kiss miss ---none of the other lines rhyme, so this sounds out-of-place. VERY nice ...

ok, i don't know if you could make this into any other song but a slow one...and since i can't sing to you over the internet very well (nor do ...

wow...i it didn't have a great rhythm, but that just me trying to make this into a proper critique. truthfully, i thought this poem was really good. it was straightfoward, ...

the last line didn't impress me as the rest of the poem did, and while the second stanza seemed like you were about to stray, you quickly reeled it back ...

3rd line: it floats put IT'S steady. you said "is" rephrase line four, it feels awkward. to surprise is chosen, -- i didn't get that. don't capatilize "silent snowflakes" right, ...

alright since you asked for help, i'll try. not liking the intro first line. make it die. first stanza : just...add more. it was a great image - why don't ...

you know, i saw that you were a novice and twelve years old (and bitterly recalled my poetry from two years ago) and i immediately assumed this poem would be ...

well, this was very much story-like and didn't really have anything but structure to define it as a "poem", per say. This was like a prose and even lacked poetic ...

this poems is rather cute, and rhymes, which is a rarity. it drifts a bit and certainly isn't award-worthy but i loved the meaning, the fluent-ness. and, well, actually - ...

the poem had good parts, but was relatively boring. it was sort of like this to me: good! boring boring good! boring boring boooooooringgggggg GOOD! boring ..good! haha. what i ...

wow this poem is really good. this first stanza hooked me, and it sort of faded a bit in the middle second stanza, but came back strong and clear and ...